Finially, a story!!!
hey yall. im just going to post what the title says, a story.
Note: this is an original story created be of course me, Nathan Smith, =p and therefore there are no legal requirements to use parts of this story in anything, although i please ask of thou that thy doust not useth this story for thy school worketh, or print it in any wayeth fourm or size. i thank thee and hope ye all injoy. this is my fictitional worldwar3 story. note this is a test to see if you all like it =0, and is also therefore short. after you read ill have my email at the bottom of the page and i ask that you email me with your revies from 1-10 1 being horid, and there bieng no point in me continuing, and 10 being great and i should keep writing deffiletaly. i also ask you write a few comments with the rating explaning what i could do better, complimenting, or sugestions. without funther ado i give you my story. i will try to email you back .
Prolouge:
John crouched behind the embnakment as a group of soilders walked by. He reloaded his
m-44, and waited. he issued a comand, and his soilders and him all stood up quietly.
they all fired as if one beast of war. their enemey had no chance, they where all dead within a few seconds.
"lets move in" a voice cried from the group of soilders.
"wait,there could be more hiding you fool".
so they all waited a few minutes and to make sure it was safe, then they moved in. searching the bodeid for anything they could use. they found some ammo and food usefulthings someone yelled out"i think i found it, sir!"
john went over to him to confirm. they had found what they were looking for.
Notes: its kind of misterious ans all butkind of good. i know its not all that great, and i hope you liked it some. its kind of slow at first but it gets better latter, i pormmise. if you want more here it is. oh yeah im not dont with this chapter yet and therefore it may seem unfinished, but the rest will be along shortly.
Chapter1:
Bill had been a police officer just a few weeks ago, but now he found himself a capitan in the british army. he and his company of 44 soilders were sailing towards the beaches of normandy where his ansistors ahd fought over a hundred years ago. the beaches were under the controll of the reformed U.S.S.R(united soviet socialist republics)whitch now included Germany. they were nearing the beaches. he could see the old gun turrets, the scars of battle, and past those the newly built war factory.
from where bill was it looked puny, buy it was really the size of new york city.
his mission was to stop its production the best he could. and all he knew about what it was making was ther they would distory the allied countries.
one of the soilders yelled out in pain ad the craft suddenly landed and he hit his head on the side of the boat. the pilot of the craft hit a button on the control board,and the cloaking device turned on.the craft also started to reasemble its self into a different shape.when it was done it was more of an armoured tank transport, than a boat. the name of these things is a m.a.t.t. or a "mobile armoured transportation tank" so therefore most people just call them m.a.t.t.s . they have slots in the sides for people carried in them to shoot out of. he frlt his eart poundingin his chest as they approached the gates to the factory. thay were about 18 miles awat and were also traveling at about 220 mph. bill knew they would be ariving shortly so he pulled out hit Pcg2(pulse chaingun type two) and checked all the connections on it. mounting it in the slow he sigghed and thought about what he would do when the war was over. Jim, bills friend, climed the ladder to the weapon controll station. the matt is equiped with several removable missle launcher/ machineguns. they were just about there and now they could truely see the size of the factory.
"we dont stand a chance" bill thought, and how right he was. inside of the factory there were millions, if not billions, of battleready droids, and other prototype modles too. bill realzed they were justabout at the gate and that the matts had slown down and came to a stop. bill gould see a couple of guard patrolls walking around the factory walls. one guard hit the side of a matt and fell backwards, yelling with pain. another guard saw this amd bashed the alarm button right as a allied sniper hit him right behind the right eye. he slumped to the ground, dead but thesniped had been to late. the factorys doors opened. this in turn released thousands of the droids inside of the factory. an erie silence steeled over the battle feild, the only sound was the breathing of the soilders and the clinking of the droids metal boots on the ground. the matts converted all power from cloaking to sheilds reveiling them selves.
the droids reacted by walking forwards, each step at exactly the same time. the soilders pulled back the levers on the guns,insctively, cocking them and thus creating a metalic locking sound. from what seemed like nowhere some unnkown voice yelled "fire!!!". the soilders all heard this and pulled back the trigers on their guns.the battle had began. after the soilders started shooting, as you can imagen the
droids started firing back. the gun turrets started firing. droids lost body parts very quickly after the turrets started shooting, and the droin lines just kept falling and falling. the droids walked over hundreds of destroyed, or half working brotheren. Bill niticed that most of the droids were heading towards his m.a.t.t. .
he aimed for their central processing units, killing many droids this way. there was a click and his gun stoped firing. he attatched it to the soilder strap and ammo/supply room. He took somewhere between 10 and 30 grenades, some food, and a PCML3(phase-converter missle launcher type three). you all probaly dont know this, but PCG2s have an unlimited ammount of ammo. the only draw back to them is that they have to recharge every so often. Bill rushed back to his slot and remounted, but this time with a PCML3. most people concider these to be one of the best weapons on the earth, but no tests have been conducted. he fired the wapon at the middle of the droid column. there was a blinding flash of light, then a big explosion. droids were sent flying in every directuon. their severed arms and legs lauding themsleves in other deoids severing main connections and overloading their circuts, that caused other minor explosions. before anyone knew what as happening, the m.a.t.t. was on its side, with a big whole in it. the droids were pouring through it. some one yelled from another m.a.t.t., "the BIG ones are comming!!!, run!"...... to be continued
End notes: i hope you liked it, and now is the time to rate it and coment on it.
the email adress is,
Scrabble06@aol.com
thank you for visiting the blog and i hape you had a good time. and i will tey to email you back
Note: this is an original story created be of course me, Nathan Smith, =p and therefore there are no legal requirements to use parts of this story in anything, although i please ask of thou that thy doust not useth this story for thy school worketh, or print it in any wayeth fourm or size. i thank thee and hope ye all injoy. this is my fictitional worldwar3 story. note this is a test to see if you all like it =0, and is also therefore short. after you read ill have my email at the bottom of the page and i ask that you email me with your revies from 1-10 1 being horid, and there bieng no point in me continuing, and 10 being great and i should keep writing deffiletaly. i also ask you write a few comments with the rating explaning what i could do better, complimenting, or sugestions. without funther ado i give you my story. i will try to email you back .
Prolouge:
John crouched behind the embnakment as a group of soilders walked by. He reloaded his
m-44, and waited. he issued a comand, and his soilders and him all stood up quietly.
they all fired as if one beast of war. their enemey had no chance, they where all dead within a few seconds.
"lets move in" a voice cried from the group of soilders.
"wait,there could be more hiding you fool".
so they all waited a few minutes and to make sure it was safe, then they moved in. searching the bodeid for anything they could use. they found some ammo and food usefulthings someone yelled out"i think i found it, sir!"
john went over to him to confirm. they had found what they were looking for.
Notes: its kind of misterious ans all butkind of good. i know its not all that great, and i hope you liked it some. its kind of slow at first but it gets better latter, i pormmise. if you want more here it is. oh yeah im not dont with this chapter yet and therefore it may seem unfinished, but the rest will be along shortly.
Chapter1:
Bill had been a police officer just a few weeks ago, but now he found himself a capitan in the british army. he and his company of 44 soilders were sailing towards the beaches of normandy where his ansistors ahd fought over a hundred years ago. the beaches were under the controll of the reformed U.S.S.R(united soviet socialist republics)whitch now included Germany. they were nearing the beaches. he could see the old gun turrets, the scars of battle, and past those the newly built war factory.
from where bill was it looked puny, buy it was really the size of new york city.
his mission was to stop its production the best he could. and all he knew about what it was making was ther they would distory the allied countries.
one of the soilders yelled out in pain ad the craft suddenly landed and he hit his head on the side of the boat. the pilot of the craft hit a button on the control board,and the cloaking device turned on.the craft also started to reasemble its self into a different shape.when it was done it was more of an armoured tank transport, than a boat. the name of these things is a m.a.t.t. or a "mobile armoured transportation tank" so therefore most people just call them m.a.t.t.s . they have slots in the sides for people carried in them to shoot out of. he frlt his eart poundingin his chest as they approached the gates to the factory. thay were about 18 miles awat and were also traveling at about 220 mph. bill knew they would be ariving shortly so he pulled out hit Pcg2(pulse chaingun type two) and checked all the connections on it. mounting it in the slow he sigghed and thought about what he would do when the war was over. Jim, bills friend, climed the ladder to the weapon controll station. the matt is equiped with several removable missle launcher/ machineguns. they were just about there and now they could truely see the size of the factory.
"we dont stand a chance" bill thought, and how right he was. inside of the factory there were millions, if not billions, of battleready droids, and other prototype modles too. bill realzed they were justabout at the gate and that the matts had slown down and came to a stop. bill gould see a couple of guard patrolls walking around the factory walls. one guard hit the side of a matt and fell backwards, yelling with pain. another guard saw this amd bashed the alarm button right as a allied sniper hit him right behind the right eye. he slumped to the ground, dead but thesniped had been to late. the factorys doors opened. this in turn released thousands of the droids inside of the factory. an erie silence steeled over the battle feild, the only sound was the breathing of the soilders and the clinking of the droids metal boots on the ground. the matts converted all power from cloaking to sheilds reveiling them selves.
the droids reacted by walking forwards, each step at exactly the same time. the soilders pulled back the levers on the guns,insctively, cocking them and thus creating a metalic locking sound. from what seemed like nowhere some unnkown voice yelled "fire!!!". the soilders all heard this and pulled back the trigers on their guns.the battle had began. after the soilders started shooting, as you can imagen the
droids started firing back. the gun turrets started firing. droids lost body parts very quickly after the turrets started shooting, and the droin lines just kept falling and falling. the droids walked over hundreds of destroyed, or half working brotheren. Bill niticed that most of the droids were heading towards his m.a.t.t. .
he aimed for their central processing units, killing many droids this way. there was a click and his gun stoped firing. he attatched it to the soilder strap and ammo/supply room. He took somewhere between 10 and 30 grenades, some food, and a PCML3(phase-converter missle launcher type three). you all probaly dont know this, but PCG2s have an unlimited ammount of ammo. the only draw back to them is that they have to recharge every so often. Bill rushed back to his slot and remounted, but this time with a PCML3. most people concider these to be one of the best weapons on the earth, but no tests have been conducted. he fired the wapon at the middle of the droid column. there was a blinding flash of light, then a big explosion. droids were sent flying in every directuon. their severed arms and legs lauding themsleves in other deoids severing main connections and overloading their circuts, that caused other minor explosions. before anyone knew what as happening, the m.a.t.t. was on its side, with a big whole in it. the droids were pouring through it. some one yelled from another m.a.t.t., "the BIG ones are comming!!!, run!"...... to be continued
End notes: i hope you liked it, and now is the time to rate it and coment on it.
the email adress is,
Scrabble06@aol.com
thank you for visiting the blog and i hape you had a good time. and i will tey to email you back
posted by Newt at 2:05 AM
2 Comments:
nate, that story is really good! i hope there is more to come. you have a great sence of imagry.
nathan, this story is great. I think by far my favorite line is about the droids stomping over thier broken or half working "brethren". The detail is great too. I like how you made the connection back to the previous world wars and the soldiers' ancesstors-- powerful!
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